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很多考生对自己托福写作低分的原因不太清楚，也就没有办法找到改进的地方。其实考生们在托福写作上经常会用一些差劲的句子，正是这些句子导致了大家的托福写作的低分。下面为大家整理了25个托福写作的差劲句与改进后的，供大家借鉴。
1. I am not good at maths, but English
改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
2. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children’s leisure time?
改进: Who is the proper person to plan children’s leisure time?
3.It is children who clear about their interests.
改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.
4. I agree the latter idea.(漏掉介词是大家在托福写作中低分的常见病句。)
改进: I agree with the latter idea.
5. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
6. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
7. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.(语义重复也是大家在托福写作中导致低分的主要原因)
改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
8. No one knows all the things.
改进: No one knows everything.
9. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
10. Each form of shavings friends has its advantages.
改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
11. I was admitted to a Key University for which few dared to sign up.
改进: I was admitted to a Key University to which few dared to apply.
12. Luckily, he recognized an American professor.
改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
13. They will learn the bad habits.
改进: They will develop bad habits.
14. In this continued process, people make progress.
改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
15. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary.
16. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency.
改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
17. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result.
18. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing.
改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream.
19. Children should be taught disciplines in groups to avoid unnecessary lost.
改进: Children should be taught discipline in groups to avoid unnecessary loss.
20. I felt alone.
21. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
22. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
23. What’s about nonsmokers?
改进: What about nonsmokers?
24. Why not to be a non-smoker?
改进: Why not be a non-smoker?
25. Everyone will have many friends in his life.
改进: Everyone has friends in his life.
以上这25个问题句子是导致大家在托福写作中低分的主要原因，而且是大家在托福写作中最容易犯的错误，所以大家一定要引以为戒。 |
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